Close Up for One Deep Breath


the lotus unfurls
beneath stained-glass wings; dragon
grasping the sacred

This week’s prompt for One Deep Breath is Close Up (Close, Closer, Closest). Writing haiku is much more difficult than it would seem at first glance, but I so enjoy the challenge and the stumbling steps I’m taking with it. I may just add a haiku *how-to* book to my Xmas list this year. Santa always appreciates a suggestion or two! Also on my list this year is a macro lens for my camera; I’ve offered to pitch in to Santa’s fund with the extra $ I make teaching… we’ll see if Santa is feeling very generous this year.

I’ve posted this dragonfly and lotus pic before, but it is one of my absolute favorites – a happy accident from beside the pond – and especially nice to look at now that the fish and plants are asleep for the season.


25 thoughts on “Close Up for One Deep Breath”

  1. Laura, you certainly have it. Everything you write is composed so nicely and makes a reader so comfortable. I love what you write and your Haiku is a lot better than mine! LOL! I want that book, too.

  2. Lovely photo and words. I actually like that haiku are so much mre difficult than they first seem because it creates a real challenge and its good to take the journey towards the perfect haiku…..

  3. Stained glass wings- I like that. Lovely.
    Reading back, I’ve been to Sandy Hook Bird Observatory! So I really enjoyed thinking about you sitting there watching the boats and the birds.

  4. Mary: Thanks! One of the links at the one deep breath site has a sort of contest where haikus are judged against one another – it was neat to read them and see how they’re supposed to be done.

    Susan: I’m hoping for snow soon!

    Lene: Thanks for the book suggestion – seems like I’ll have to go searching in a used bookstore. Why are the good books so often unavailable?

    Mike MC: Thanks for the suggestions – need all the help I can find!

    Thanks Sandy and Samtzmom! Having fun learning!

    Becca and Jone: Thank you both for the encouragment.

    Liza: Yea? Thought I was *grasping* myself with that!

    Naturwoman: I need to see some summer colors too once in a while.

    Crafty Green Poet: I love a good haiku and the way it surprises the reader.

    Vicki: Have you been? I remember you said once that your dad loved Cape May.

    Robin Andrea: Thanks. 😉

    Patrick: You’re a poet too!

    When I first read your comment I didn’t realize you had written a haiku at all. To be honest when you said *odes* I thought you meant odes like poems. Then I realized you meant *odes* as in dragonflies – then I *saw* the haiku – very clever of you.

    I’m excited about the macro too – it will sort of break the bank, though.

    Simone: nosebonks back at ‘ya!

    paris parfait: Thanks!

    Cathy: Thanks – I really enjoy the prompts when they give me an idea and I have a photo to match.

  5. Gorgeous photo! And the haiku is so wonderfully descriptive that it stands on it’s own merit 🙂
    I especially like how you used the word “sacred”…it really makes for a powerful ending.
    Please keep coming back! (to ODB)

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